Feedback to Final idea "Dragons Den" Pitch:

1.How did the pitch go?

The pitch was successful and we fully explained the idea to the rest of the class. Both me and Drew presented the idea explaining how the narrative will play out and what camera angles we will use.

2. What feedback were you given?

Once we had finished the pitch we were given a range of feedback. It was clear that the class enjoyed the idea and were interested by idea of cutting between different locations which they said would be engaging. This is the feedback we received:
Harry Buxton - "I like the narrative of the music video and I am interested in how you are going to stage the idea of objects disappearing from the room. Are they going to physically disappear through editing techniques or cut to the room with certain objects missing? Maybe experiment with both?
Rachael Hustler - "I enjoyed the pitch and I like the idea of him reminiscing over fond memories whilst high on drugs. Although, could the end of the film end on him being alone instead of her meeting him again, to show the negative effects of drugs".

3. Have you made any changes as a result?
We have decided to change the ending so that instead of meeting the girl again and getting back together, he is simply left alone in the empty room. An aerial shot will shoot him from above lying on a single mattress. This is a more appropriate ending as it shows the negative impacts of drugs and how they can disrupt a relationship and ultimately a life.

4. Has it made you less/more determined to continue with a certain aspect of your coursework?
This has driven us to continue with our genre and storyline only helping us develop our idea and ultimately refine the idea to make it more professional. We would like to continue refining the idea although some of this may change whilst actually filming it. However, I think our plotline will be successful because it is simplistic and so doesn't make things over complicated. Another thing we must consider is the time limit with the song lasting roughly 3 minutes. Although, we are adding the introduction film to the beginning to give the narrative a little more depth and realism.